I remember teachers in school who were big on expensive words.They'd say things like, "Why use a ten cent word, when you can use a five dollar word? " Meaning, make it visual, make your writing come to life, liven it up!
For example, which of these sentences is more fun?
(a) They danced all night.
OR
(b) The lively young couple, lost in the thrill of newfound love, frolicked and bounded all over the busy, dusty barn floor until the sun peeped through the little rough-cut windows, when they collapsed in laughter on the perimeter of golden hay.
(Silly, I know. I don't spend much time on these, but you get the idea.)
So.... ready? I will give you one measly boring sentence (like "a" above), and you turn it into a "b." You can go many directions with this, so I am only giving out one "a" and hoping to receive a a lot of "b's" for it. You are only limited by your imagination (and your very good taste).
(a) The bird went away.
Okay, "b's," anyone?
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The speckled wren, chirping loudly, heard the fierce-looking predator growling below and swiftly flew deep into the thick forest.
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